Revisions

So recently there have been two thing that I have been doing with my script. One major and one minor. The minor change was brought to my attention by Ellen and Jessica. I didn't understand what they were saying at first but now I do. I am too direct when I write. It would be much better if I used word like alcoholic and drunk less, so that I'm not to forward. Now the second thing I am doing is because of what Matt told me on Thursday. My script doesn't really go anywhere. It ends with the same thing it started with. I get that, and I can see how that can be bad. This would mean that I need to make major changes to the three monologues I have so that there can be some change. I have made it so that now Alexa finds our that her father wasn't actually drunk when he died, and soberly committed suicide because he was depressed.  This would mean I would need someone to tell Alexa, so I introduced a detective to be investigating the incident. He will appear in the first scene and last scene, to be that change so that the script doesn't end where it started. This is my new difficulty. Before I had finally come up with an ending I liked, but now I have to change it and that has posed a challenge. I have two options I am debating. One is he tells Alexa and the scene ends before Alexa really gets to react. But then I worry that it would be confusing. I would just expect everyone to know that Alexa would be surprised and that she would see her father differently. The other option is Alexa having more of a conversation with the detective, her understanding all the facts completely and everything is very explained. I personally find this boring, would prefer to do it the first way. Right before the detective enters I have Alexa talking about how she would actually miss him and that he was loved, so it's not like with the first ending option I don't clue that she would see him differently, but I still worry it's not enough.