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On Friday I talked to Ellen who gave me some advice. In my script the father is only seen as a negative figure. At the end I want the daughter, Alexa, to have a moment when she understands her father, but Ellen made me see that showing the dad as nothing but cruel doesn't give Alexa and reason to forgive her father. I had an idea that I wasn't sure of including because it would morph the script a lot. When Ellen told me what she thought of the script I told her my idea because I felt it could fix the problem. What I am now doing is making it so that instead of having the father hurt Alexa, I have a morning after scene where the father is shown more as a human that regrets what he did. The daughter still would see this as nothing and be angry with him, but the audience can see that he isn't in control of his actions and regrets what he does so that at the end, Alexa's forgiving isn't so surprising.